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Is your idea of success the same as your parents' idea of success?

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I think my idea and my parents' is almost similar, because I always communicate with my parents. 
I think my idea and my parents’ are almost similar because I always communicate with them.
Use 'are' instead of 'is' because you are talking about two ideas.
I removed the comma before the word ‘because.’
Pronouns are used as substitute for nouns. Use the pronoun 'them' to avoid redundant use of the phrase 'my parents.'
I think my ideas are similar with my parents' because I always communicate with them.

My definition of "a successful life" is to live affluent enough to do what I want.
My definition of "a successful life" is to live affluently enough to do what I want.
Adjectives are words that modify or describe nouns. Adverbs are words that modify adjectives, verbs, or another adverb. The word ‘affluent’ is used as an adverb because it describes the word live, which is a verb. Change it to ‘affluently’.
My definition of "a successful life" is living affluently enough to do what I want.

 

My recipe for getting success includes passion, strong physical strength( to support my passion), sincerity, good relationship with many people. 
My recipe for getting success includes passion, strong physical strength (to support passion), sincerity, and good relationship with many people.
Put a space after the word ‘strength.

Also I think it's important to have carefree attitude and self-esteem for happy life. 
I also think it’s important to have carefree attitude and have great self-esteem for a happy life.
Don’t start your sentence with ‘also’ in an academic writing. 
Add the article ‘a’ before the word ‘carefree’ and ‘happy.’

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