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Tell about a time you suppressed your emotions

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When I did volunteer work at a kindergarten for children with disabilities, I played with one autistic child. The boy was very timid. So, I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I felt a lot of for him, in order to do not hurt his delicate mind.

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When I did volunteer work at a kindergarten for children with disabilities, I played with one autistic child.
This sentence is correct.

The boy was very timid. So, I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I felt a lot of for him, in order to do not hurt his delicate mind.
The boy was very timid, so I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I felt for him in order not to hurt his delicate mind.
As the first sentence is short, you may blend the two sentences into one. It is not advised that you start your sentence with "so". Instead of saying 'in order to do not...' you can simply say 'in order not to...' Make sure to arrange the words properly.
The boy was very timid, that I saw the need to treat him attentively and to suppress the sympathy that I felt for him in order not to hurt his delicate mind.  

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