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The Country I visited

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I went to Thailand last year with my university friends for 5 days. I went to ocean of Pattaya. I rode a boat and jet-ski. It was very scary and funny. And I saw Tiffany's Show which is a very famous transgender show. It was fun too. I went to Bangkok to get a massage and ate a Thailand food. I ate Tom Yum Goong, but it is not my style. It was a fun and nice trip of my life!!

I went to Thailand last year with my university friends for 5 days.  I went to ocean of Pattaya. I rode a boat and jet-ski. It was very scary and funny.
These sentences are correct.

And I saw Tiffany's Show which is a very famous transgender show.
I saw Tiffany's Show, which is a very famous transgender show.
Avoid using AND at the beginning of a sentence in a formal writing. Put a comma (,) before "which".  
I saw Tiffany's Show, which is a very famous show for transgender people.

It was fun too. I went to Bangkok to get a massage and ate a Thailand food. I ate Tom Yum Goong, but it is not my style. It was a fun and nice trip of my life!!
It was fun, too. I went to Bangkok to get a massage and ate Thai food. I ate Tom Yum Goong, but it is not my style. It was a fun and nice trip of my life!!
Put a comma before 'too'.
If you mean food from Thailand or Thai cuisine, you can say 'Thai food'.

  

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