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Home work – Stephanie

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Most important things in my life are the time management and sleep. If I did not make a plan for a day I could not even do a small thing and it is stressful. Furthermore, when I take a less sleep than usual, I easily get stressed and could not focus on all the things in my university life for instance studying in a class, and doing assignments. Those two factors affect me a lot in my life, so that I always trying to be punctual to anything from my schedule, and going to bed early for enough sleep for the next day.

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Most important things in my life are the time management and sleep.
The most important things in my life are time management and sleep.
Most is always introduced by the article "the".

If I did not make a plan for a day I could not even do a small thing and it is stressful.
If I did not make a plan for a day, I could not even do a small thing and it is stressful.
Conditional clauses are clauses that begin with "if". They clause should be followed by a comma.

Futhermore, when I take a less sleep than usual, I easily get stressed and could not focus on all the things in my university life for instance studying in a class, and doing assignments.
Furthermore, when I take less sleep than usual, I easily get stressed and could not focus on all the things in my university life, for instance, studying in class and doing assignments.
Use commas before and between the phrase "for instance" to set an example.
When I don't get enough sleep, it usually makes me unfocused on the things I have to do in my university such as studying and doing assignments.

Those two factors affect me a lot in my life, so that I always trying to be punctual to anything from my schedule, and going to bed early for enough sleep for the next day.
Those two factors affect me a lot in my life so I'm always trying to be punctual at anything by going to bed early to get enough sleep for the next day.
Use 'I am' or 'I'm' when the verb is in a present continuous form. Punctual at is a better expression. Remove unnecessary words. 
Time management and sleep greatly affects my daily activities. To overcome difficulties, I make it a habit to come on time and get enough sleep.

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