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In my opinion, our personalities are dependent on the environment that we are living. Even at this moment, our personality are being affected by surronded circumstances. For example, many studies about the effect of environments on the personalities have done and we have noticed that it works. If you are twins and you live in another city while your another twin lives in other city, you two will not be same as time goes. You might be affected by specific circumstances and you will have become far other person than you expected in near future.  

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In my opinion, our personalities are dependent on the environment that we are living.
In my opinion, our personality depends on the environment that we are living.
Do you mean depend? (Depend- to be influenced or determined by something else.)

Even at this moment, our personality are being affected by surronded circumstances.
Even at this moment, our personality is being affected by our surrounding circumstances.
Use ‘is’, ‘personality’ is singular.
Surrounding is the proper word to use.

For example, many studies about the effect of environments on the personalities have done and we have noticed that it works.
For example, many studies show that the effects of the environment on our personality has a big impact in our lives.
Is this what you mean?
No need to put s in the word "environment".

If you are twins and you live in another city while your another twin lives in other city, you two will not be same as time goes.
If you are twins and you live in another city while your another twin lives in another city, you two will not be the same as time goes by.
goes by- if time goes by, it passes
Another is used with a singular noun and other is used with uncountable and plural nouns.
the same - always put the before the word same

You might be affected by specific circumstances and you will have become far other person than you expected in near future.
You might be affected by particular circumstances and you will become far from being the person you used to be.
far from- used to say that something very different happens
"particular" (unique) is a better word to use instead of "specific" (not general)

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