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"Do you think men and women's lifestyles differ from each other? Why do you think so?"

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I chose the question number 2. "Do you think men and women's lifestyles differ from each other? why do you think so?"

In my opinion, there are no any differences between men's and women's lifestyles. It is always up to personal matters. Of course also it depends on the culture in many countries such as in Middle East where has strict role for women and men. All the parts of gender's role are already decided when the people are born in the culture. However, in another culture where has not a force for someone to do somethings, everyone, not divided into men and women, can choose their own life styles. To sum up, I strongly believe that lifestyles could be changed by individuals not gender.

검은색:학생영작=> [Student's sentence] 
파란색:수정문장=> [Corrected sentence]
빨간색:문법설명=> [Grammar explanation]
초록색:나은문장=> [Better sentence] green
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In my opinion, there are no any differences between men's and women's lifestyles.
In my opinion, there are no differences between men and women's lifestyles.
Based on the context of the sentence, "no" suffices your point.
"Men and women" are joined by "and" which makes them a compound noun and acts as one or as a whole, and takes a possessive form using the apostrophe (') plus "s" towards lifestyles.


  
It is always up to personal matters.
The sentence is correct.


Of course also it depends on the culture in many countries such as in Middle East where has strict role for women and men.
Of course, it also depends on the culture in many countries such as in Middle East where it has a strict role for women and men.
A comma indicates a pause between the ending of an introductory word, phrase, or clause, and the beginning of the main part of the sentence.
To avoid redundancy, pronouns are used to refer to the proper noun.

Roles of men and women have become dependent on their country's culture.

All the parts of gender's role are already decided when the people are born in the culture.
All gender's roles are already decided when the people are born in the culture.
"Parts" and "role" seemed redundant to the context of this sentence.
"Roles" is used instead of "role" as we are referring to the many (or at least some) of the roles that both genders (men and women) have.

Roles for both genders have been predetermined from birth and are influenced by their respective cultures.


However, in another culture where has not a force for someone to do somethings, everyone, not divided into men and women, can choose their own life styles.
However, there are cultures where they do not force someone to do something; everyone can choose their own lifestyles.
Keep your sentences short but on point. Elaborate only when needed.
However, there are cultures that respect both genders' roles in which they can choose their own lifestyles.

To sum up, I strongly believe that lifestyles could be changed by individuals not gender.
To sum up, I strongly believe that lifestyles could be changed by individuals and not by gender.  
Make sure your points are clearly stated.

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