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My Long Holiday

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1. Happy I was happy for lonng holiday because e For the holidays, I traved and played golf with my friend 2. Excited I feel very excited play golf but itst long tim is very difficult. 3. stress out I stress out about play golf. because it is a sensitive sports, So it is a very difficult I started golf tree years ago. So it is very excited these days but I stree out about golf 4. suprised Today, After hearing my sister sick I'm suprised She is cancer 5. relaxed I think people need to relaxe sometimes. But people are so busy with work

검은색:학생영작=> [Student's sentence]
파란색:수정문장=> [Corrected sentence]
빨간색:문법설명=> [Grammar explanation]
초록색:나은문장=> [Better sentence] green
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1. Happy
I was happy for lonng holiday because e For the holidays, I traved and played golf with my friend
I feel happy because of the long holiday. During the holiday, I traveled and I played golf with my friends.
Traveled and played should be in past tense because the action is already done.
Use "DURING" during is a preposition which is used before a noun (during + noun) to say when something happens.

2. Excited  and 3. Stress Out  
I feel very excited play golf but itst long tim is very difficult. I stress out about play golf. because it is a sensitive sports, So it is a very difficult I started golf tree years ago. So it is very excited these days but I stree out about golf  
At first, I felt very excited to play golf but after a long time, it has become difficult that it already stresses me out. Golf is difficult because it is a sensitive kind of sports. I started playing golf three years ago.     
In writing, you need to organize your thoughts in order to construct good sentences.

4. Surprised
After hearing my sister sick  I'm suprised She is cancer. 
After hearing that my sister is sick, I got surprised. She has cancer.  
Please be mindful of your punctuation (comma between a dependent and an independent clause). She has + noun.
I was surprised to learn that my sister is sick. She has got cancer. 

5. Relaxed
relaxed I think people need to relaxe sometimes. But people are so busy with work  
I think people need to relax sometimes. Unfortunately, they are busy with work.  
Please take note of teh correct spelling of the words. End your sentence with a period. (.) "Unfortunately" will make the sentence clearer.
I think people need to relax sometimes. Unfortunately, they are too busy with work to do so.

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