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Tell about a time you suppressed your emotions.

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When I did volunteer work at a kindergarten for children with disabilities, I played with one autistic child. The boy was very timid. So, I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I feel a lot of for him, in order to do not hurt his delicate mind.  


When I did volunteer work at a kindergarten for children with disabilities, I played with one autistic child. 
This sentence is correct.
When I volunteered to work at a kindergarten for children with disabilities, I played with one autistic child. 

The boy was very timid.
This sentence is correct.

So, I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I feel a lot of for him, in order to do not hurt his delicate mind. 
So, I should treat him attentively and suppress the sympathy that I feel for him in order not to hurt his delicate mind.
Instead of saying 'in order to do not...' you can simply say 'in order not to...' Make sure to arrange the words properly.
Therefore, I should treat him with attentiveness and suppress the sympathy that I feel towards him in order not to hurt his delicate mind.

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